Thursday, April 1, 2010

Personal Statement - first draft

Thanks everyone for your comments. I've posted a second draft, which I think works a bit better.

2 comments:

#1 Dinosaur said...

That's really beautiful.

I'd leave out the quotation marks on the closing sentences of each section. Perhaps use italics to help them stand out the way you seem to intend.

Kendra said...

I concur with the above commenter. Really great essay. Will stand out amongst the sea of "I love to help people" personal statements. In my experience, standing out is a very good thing.